"Pain Strikes Sparks On Me, The Pain Of Terezin"
Fifteen beds. Fifteen charts with names,
Fifteen people without a family tree.
Fifteen bodies for whom torture is medicine and pills.
Beds over which crimson blood of ages spills.
Fifteen bodies that want to live here.
Thirty eyes seeking quietness.
Bald heads that gape from out of the prison.
The holines of suffering, which is none of my business.
The loveliness of the air, which day after day
Smells of strangeness and carbolic,
The nurses that carry thermometers
Mothers who grope after a smile.
Food is such a luxury here.
A long, long night, and a brief day.
But anyway, I don't want to leave
The lighted rooms and the burning cheeks,
Nurses who leave behind them only a shadow
To help the little sufferers.
I'd like to stay here, a small patient,
Waiting the doctor's daily round,
Until after a long, long time, I'd be well again.
Then I'd like to live
And go back home again.
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I think that you did great on your interpretation of this poem. I really like how you take literal lines from the poem into you're butterfly. Like when it talks about blood, so you put fake blood on your butterfly. Or again when it mentions pills and so you put pills made of clay. I also think it was a good idea to put the bars on the other side, because it shows how the poem speaks of being trapped in suffering.
ReplyDeleteThis is a good butterfly. The blood looks good, which sounds kind of weird but makes sense in this case, and I liked how I could see things directly from the poem. The butterfly shape itself looks very good, and all the things on top make total sense. This is a great butterfly. The only mistake I noticed was that one of the tags had the word "is" when it should have said "are," but that's just a typo. Other than that, this was great.
ReplyDeleteMy favorite feature about your butterfly where the eyes. I like the fact that the eyes had more than one meaning. I love that idea and it went well with the poem. I wish I thought of that, it was very clever. Also, I like the fact that we both used a pill bottle and blood to express the poem. The picture attached to the "Arbeit Macht Frei" sign gave me a better understanding and I learned more information about Terezin, so thank you for including that! Since there was a bit of hope in the poem, I like that you added the two lines in the middle of the butterfly since the author had hope and was optimistic. All in all, I enjoyed your butterfly and it was very detailed!
ReplyDeleteThis is such a creative butterfly, your poem was very direct as to what it was talking about, but you made it seem more than that. You took your butterfly to the next level, which is really good, like with the bottle. Your poem was talking about medicine in general, but you decided to put a bottle with pills all over. Which is actually really interesting, because this is what I meant when you took your butterfly to the next level, you thought outside of the box. I also found it fascinating how you thought of the eyes on your butterfly as the Nazi's, because when I first read your poem the eyes reminded me of the patients the, 30 patients. So when you explained how it could have various meanings, I never thought of it that way and I was really fascinated as to how you found a connection. This is really good, so keep it up.
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ReplyDeleteYour butterfly is amazing. Everything meshes: the Nazis' evil eyes appear to be watching the defenseless patients suffer through tortures only to return to labor soon after. I even sympathize with the author a bit; many times I have felt trapped and stuck in hospitals, with no end or way out in sight. They kinda have a way of doing that, don't they? Regardless of my connection to the poem, your pills look realistic, and the other images fit well to the poem. Your tags have no discernible errors either. All in all, keep up the superb work!
Hey Sophie, your butterfly was great. All the features you added on your butterfly really graves the attention about your peom. The eyes and pills were good to add on your butterfly. The pills look very realistic. I like how in some parts you explain parts that have a sad feeling to it and other parts that good. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteHello, Sophie! After analyzing your Butterfly, I was able to observe how organized, though-out, and creative it was! One of the first things I enjoyed about your Butterfly was its items and their relevance to your Poem. With items such as the pill bottle, I had quickly seen why they were placed there. The second aspect of your Butterfly that I particularly enjoyed was your use of relevant textual evidence. The quotes you used were spot-on and great choices for your links. Keep up the fantastic work!
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